Hey! Nat Here! I hope you are happy now and enjoying a new life. You didn't have to say much in order for me to understand. It is hard when you love someone for so long and give of yourself without having that same love given back. Again I hope you are doing much better! Great flow of this writing by the way
Wow. This is somewhat intense. I'll be honest, I'm not a fan only because it has such a dark ending. But even though I don't like it. Somehow, I see how people can feel that way after being abused for so long, that is all they know. Not all writings are cream and rainbows.
SO quick question, the character wants to be saved but then doesn't want to in the conclusion? There is a bit of confusion for me in the character..
please just save me
maybe i'm not much into blues. But your writing shows promise, without bringing my emotions in it i'd say it is a pretty good piece.
Hm interesting. Sounds like a conversation from a movie. It got my attention. I am wondering where this would be going. Is it going to be a story or more informative about a character?
You have a very nice flow to you story. It was very professional. It felt like this story was more than just a short story. It sounded more personal almost like it happened for real. You have talent. And I am rating your talent.
I don't have any negative critiques for your work. Just keep writing.
Once upon a time there was a story that started with once upon a time. Everyday it stood waiting for a soul, longing to make a mark in this story. One day, the Creator of the blanks decided to send out a an email trying to find the right person to fill in the blanks. Because of that people flooded the stories everyone with their own ideas, everyone taking a shot a winning the story's heart but even though the stories were amazing and everyone had a gift for the Creator of the Blanks, someone just had to stumble across and not meet the quota. Typing away she went, just typing and typing and not knowing what to write. Until finally, an idea popped into her head... The story can't wait any longer but it will have to wait to be continued. I'm sorry to the Creator of the blanks, The story didn't want me to continue on it's adventure. But the girl with the fast typing fingers will return.
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