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Review by Misty Shade
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
My heart breaks for this poor man, now living in fear caused by an accident. It's so unfair.

You wrote this brilliantly, I was entranced in this story from the beginning to the end and I just couldn't leave without saying it.

I loved this sad story.
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Review by Misty Shade
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I know you surely didn't want any reviews on this and it sounds as though you basically needed an outlet for your near to bursting emotions, but I would like to say that it takes a strong person to admit how they feel. Even in writing to complete strangers.

And maybe this means nothing to you and if it doesn't that's okay, just know that I would've reached and taken your hand. I would have been the one ask how you were really feeling. And no matter what you believe in the contrary, there is another me around you someplace wanting to, but just not knowing how to. And I'm sure they will make themselves known.

I hope your best friend comes around and opens her eyes to see the jewel in your heart. Coz I can, Nd I don't even know you, I've just seen it in your words.

Keep writing and purging in this way, I'm sure it will help.
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Review of Stolen moment  
Review by Misty Shade
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
This was a good piece of writing, I was glad I stumbled upon it.
I could feel what Astrid was feeling throughout.
There were a few spelling and punctuation errors that gave me pause, but fortunately it did not alter my feelings after skipping over them.

I also would have like to read about how Kirk, after caressing her cheek and lips, might be leaning in slowly toward her before whispering in her ear, to add more of a visual with the building of intensity in the scene, and when he "kissed her below her neck" bothered me as it might have worked better had he "kissed her below her ear" then slowly moving across her cheek.

This scene, though, would have been a great start in a climax of a romance novel.

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