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Review of Sherbert  
Review by NicTales
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was such an enjoyable read. Your writing style flowed nicely, and Sherbert sounded adorable. I do feel like the second to last paragraph ends it better than the last, but otherwise, very nice.
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Review by NicTales
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey Flowerchild,

I think you have a very good start here, and it's clear that passion fuels your writing. Love the line, "has he forgotten the trees we have grown on?"

Really, I think you would do well to go back and expand on this. It feels like it wants to be a poem, and with a little effort, I think it would flow beautifully.

Best wishes
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