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Review by Gaius Marius
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Sam, the last sentence my friend.
"she knew that she dead?? Im guessing that was an innocent grammar mistake?

In my experience you can loose a reader in an instant like that with a simple grammar mistake or misplaced word.

But its an interesting start to your story, well for me it is.

Cheers
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