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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
That's really good. Short, to the point, yet describes vividly what's going on in the world and on the moon. In a few quick sentences you describe what the main character does and her feelings, even worked one of her friends in there. Extra short but extra good. Only problem I found was a few spelling/gramatical errors ("her" instead of "here"). Would almost like to see more on this, but don't know if it would ruin the simplicity of it, not to mention the point of a short story.
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