Wow! What an experience. Well the fact that you've haven't moved in so long means the trip was worth it after all. Being stuck in a car with the cats and the smell must have been challenging.
Well written. No errors. I don't have any suggestions.
Okay, I clicked on the story because I thought it was about women until I read the last sentence. Very funny. Not sure why visiting together as a group is a nice or needful thing. One thing I can suggest to drive home the humour is to suggest the dancing part that most women who are really pressed do. I hope you get my drift. Lol. Nice work.
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