This is my reivew of "No School Tomorrow." To the reader, this seems more like a schedule than a literary work. It is very methodical, yes, but sequence so starkly defined is not always needed in such a prose. I think that a reevaulation of the storyline and cutting out unnessecary sections would prove helpful
This is my reivew of "Passing of Summer." To the reader, this seems more like a schedule than a literary work. It is very methodical, yes, but sequence so starkly defined is not always needed in such a prose. I think that a reevaulation of the storyline and cutting out unnessecary sections would prove helpful
This is my review of "Santa's Savior" it is a decent read, but there are so many cliches that overshadow the basic premise of the poem. This is very distracting and can be eliminated to give a better work. Overall, this is a diamond in the rough.
This is my review for "Huh." The storyline is a bit disorienting, you might want to clarify. There are many abrupt breaks and a very sudden ending that doesn't suit the overall plot well. It is a succession of memories and thoughts that need to be better executed in words.
This is my review for 'I Wonder How'. This is a nice poem that hearkens back to more sentimental times. The imagery is nice, and executes the meaning and idea well. It is a decent read, which I enjoyed. It reminds me of simple country life. Good job!
This is my review of "If loving you is wrong." This is a decent poem, though it does have conflicting ideas that may prove confusing to the reader. However, it was not a bad read. I do not totally understand the characters; you might want to develop them more for better comprehension.
This is a decent poem. The uproarious tone improves the basic meaning of this piece. The sudden pauses and exclamations add to the mood. The word choice works for this poem quite well. Overall, the reader finds this piece to be rather interesting and decent.
The basic wording is decent, but some segments could use some clarification. Also, the reader thinks that this piece could be improved by changing the format from a paragraph of sorts to a poem. It has a poetic, moment-exploring quality to it. Overall, this is decent piece that could be refurbished a bit.
This is a very nice poem. It conveys the idea and emotion effectively to the reader, and is very haunting. The mechanics are decent, but the parentheses in the next to last stanza is a bit distracting. The last stanza is a very effective conclusion to the poem. This reader thoroughly enjoyed reading this great poem.
This is a though-provoking poem. It is interesting, and the sentence structure and word choice contribute to its overall tone. It accomplishes its desired effect on the reader, and does not confuse the reader. Overall, it is a nice poem, and has great potential.
This is a good poem. The idea seems solid, and the execution is effective. The imagery is nice, and the rhyme scheme aids this poem. It is short, but it is effective in its raw worksmanship. Overall, this is a decent poem, and is quite a good read.
This is an interesting poem. It is a bit short, but conveys the idea decently. More explanation about the reason for the choice of colors would help. Explaining the reason behind why each color is associated something. Overall, this is an interesting poem.
This is an interesting read. The tone of the poem captures the subject, and the description and use of common language further contributes to the poem's content. It has a songlike quality, but some names and identities can be further clarified. Overall, it is a good poem.
This is a very nice poem. It is descriptive and focused, but word choice can be improved in some parts (i.e. screwy). The imagery is decent, but the last line can be improved, or the author can omit the ellipses. Overall, this is an interesting and decent poem.
Some sentences are confusing, restructuring and rearranging will help. Some portions are descriptive, and this character seems interesting. At times, the character could seem platonic, but clever wording in the story will help. Overall, this description is interesting.
This is a thought-provoking poem. The reader enjoys the idea, which is conveyed decently. Some readers can relate to this poem, which is a large part of its appeal. It has great potential, and is very accomplished in its capturing of an idea. Overall, it was a very enjoyable read.
This story seems interesting, but lacks focus. The content of the sentences seem confusing to the reader, and the overall idea gets lost in the words. Clarification and restructuring would greatly improve this piece. The last sentences would greatly benefit from such correction.
This poem is quite interesting. Some words seem over-emphasized at parts, such as "yelled...Yelled." The last three stanzas are a bit confusing to the reader, and clarification would be very beneficial to this piece. Overall, it is a decent writing that has potential.
This is a very nice poem. I like the idea behind it, and the line structure supports the intention. The rhyming is at times inconsistent, but the reader does not know if that is what the author intends. Overall, it is a very nice poem, and it has great potential.
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