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Review of Math Attack!  
Rated: E | (3.0)
the area is always expressed in square units, like square millimeters or square inches.

the object should have been rectangle because different shapes have different formulae to calculate areas and circumferences.

Nice work thought and try to mix it up a little bit like putting the correct answer in different units, instead of 22 millimeters try 2.2 centimeters.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It just shows something people will always think presidents with 8 years or two terms are worse than presidents with one, no matter what happens.

I mean it also shows the voting on partisan bases, i mean no democrat would vote against Bill Clinton, because he was the bes they had since JFK, so at least 25% of the voters were republicans and 35% democrats
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Review of The Looters  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Well, I don't think the reasoning is correct, though sarcastic, I think it is wrong to steal no matter the circumstance.

People who were poor before, can't expect to benefit from a situation where everyone is losing, It just doesn't add up. I don't think the poor should get richer because of a storm.
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Review of About a Girl  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I pray for you to find her soon, if only there were more people who think about the personality like you do and less of the shallow minds who constantly think about the looks.

You poem is interesting and inspiring and I think you do deserv the 4.0 that everyone is giving you on this piece.

I think perfection needs more than what you wrote, it needs more emotion in such a poem, your emotions are there but they need to be expressed more freely.

Good Job
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Rated: E | (4.0)
May her soul RIP, I hope these writings of yours get you to go on in life. I liked especially about this piece its uniqueness. You din't write about the pain of letting go or the her endurance of pain. instead you wrote of memories which people can relate more to.

I also like how phrases didn't end in the same line. that's good

Good Job
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Review of AYUH, I'M NATIVE  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Vivid imagination and true stereotyping. I think you got somewhere with this piece whether or not you intended to. People realize that not all Maniacs live the same way but they think that alot of them do.

I would be interested to know what the difference is when you spoke about indoor plumbing. I think ignorant flatlanders are really just that, have your fun with them.
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Review of Fish  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I liked the simple atittude this poem carries, and it admits it. Did they not look at each other? They would have realized that they look similar.

"and after a flurry of gold scales and bubbles,"

This part is made very vague and simple, maybe two verses are in order just after this one. Just to show us what happened. also the rhyme of the last two verses.

Good Job.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
If people do tell you or email you what other is I would love to know, I personally chose Nero because of a study I wrote *Wink* in which i proved that he slowed civilisation progress by more the 200 years, that's more than both world wars put together.
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Review of Unconstitutional  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I think we should give room to atheists to join in, what if I don't believe in God, I will be a hypocrite to sing the national anthem as it is. Many people think the mention of God is ok with all relegions, so what's the harm. I think people who don't believe are not made for in society.

Great poll.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I guess getting enlightened is not a simple as you make it sound, although it definitly is as beautiful.

Thinking about

sooner or later
you get everywhere

I realized that people should spend less time planning their lives and more time actually living it.

Good Work
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Review of Touched By Love  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Lasting love is the love that makes people feel happy, feel hopeful of the world, this poem is rather inspiring and it certainly comes useful. I was surprised by your ability to write both sad and lifting poems.

The greyest of skies still look blue to me,
My heart feels light and free from pain.

When you say this, while cliche in a way, it will lift the morale of almost anyone.
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Review of VIRII  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This story sounds to me as the kind of science fiction that is aimed towards the narrower audience of detailed and specialized sci-fi.

You writing is appealing to me but I think you should go ahead and ease down the town if you want a bigger audience. Your narration of human interaction is interesting but not quite the publishable standard
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I was really startled with story I understood it not, and the only thing I figured is that your use of the current german chancellor name should either have some deep symbolic significance or is the lack of imagination on your side.

I have reviewed a number of items from your port before and all were pretty good, this one however I don't understand, If you would please answer me this:

Did you intentionally use Gerhard Shroder's name?
Did the man die or faint or something of the sort at the end of this?

If the man was a nazi officer in the years 1940-1945 and he was a 25 y/o dentist then now 60 years later he would be 85-90 years old. This story couldn't have been set 20 years earlier because cyber crime was not that big back then

I really do respect your work but I had trouble understanding this piece. I will galdly review it again if you do some editting or if you explain it to me.

Write On!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You are without doubt very comfortable with your pen, or should I say keyboard. The thing that intrigues me about this piece is your ability to transition from different moods and settings. You understand the feelings but you let it to the reader to grasp your exact manings so you don't come off as boring.

Writing as "me" or writing for "you" are always the hardest since you have to convey feeling and emotions in depth with being over-descriptive.

Great work.
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Review of Tick Tock  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nice piece of work, I liked your expressions, they are modern yet maintain the thoughtfulness that carries on with the classic items.

I think you should be able to write narrative with no problems. Or Should I say you are already able to do so.

" The digits are burnt into my mind like data on an old VGA monitor, how could I ever forget? I’ve seen them so many times before."

While it is very long to be used in everyday life, I stil think it is rahter interesting. especially that you used to similar items, digital items.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I totally agree, at the first here I collected more than 10,000 GPs by simply just reviewing the autorewarding items. Then I realized I wasn't giving my best reviews.

I went to each one and emailed:
1- apologized
2- did a detailed review
3- offered the GPs back

The result was shocking to me, a new user on the site, I was not only turned down on point 3, but I was given yet more points.

At some point, I impressed someone enough to give me a two month premium upgrade, I then resorted to giving back to the community.

A great place it is here and I agree with all you wrote, begging is not worth it. People will reward a good job in this community much better.

Thank you
Write On!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It really is interesting how much work goes into transporting your pet outside or inside a country. you sound very credible and very experienced on the topic.

Some parts of the world have different requirements such as in-house testing and compulsory 10-day quarantine.

Good Job
Write On!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It was hellarious, I enjoyed it, I used rather naughty terms in this madlib nad got a hellarious piece, I loved the part where you used a fruit and a body part to create a character name, and another by just using an animal name, it does sound like you are very creative.

Good job
Write On!
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Review of What is Erotica?  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The outcome was likely, people preview many things by the way its presented, if the terminology is clean and sensual it gives a notion of art, if it sounds dirty to the reader then they will probably categorize it as pornography. Either way it's for the reader to judge.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I have a bipolar friend and can relate, I find that for her, a pilot-hobbyist and a dancer, etiher can "cheer her up" much like sunlight for you. I would suggest some music but then I wouldn't know how it feels.

Did you try to record your depressive state on camera, on video. I did that to her and that helped her imagine it in her Manic state. But I stoppe showing it to her because it activly destroys her main state which is more friendly to me.

I know this is selfish but at least I try to be there when I can, I also think you should show this piece to your doctor. Maybe he will understand better.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The Issue you speek of is highly important and while alot of people seem to not notice it, globaly speaking, the debate is rather a tough one. I believe you have excelled in explaining the issue in a columnist-style. If that was your intetntion then Kudos to you.

However, if it wasn't then the piece seemd a bit boring. I agreed with most of your research and when the article is read it does seem unbiased. I however guess that your position as speaking within the the lst paragraph is the the UK joins out of neccesity not choice.

The sterling pound while holding strong in this government, has lost much of its worldwide power, some commonwealth and other pound-relating counrties have changed their views on the Pound and moved to the wider Euro. I believe that the UK will move towards the Euro sooner or later, that's why people have alot of faith in it.

The UK will be -joining France and Germany- one of the most important assests in the EU and a huge bridge with Oceania and North America.
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Review of Poetry Forms  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)
Very very good piece, I liked how you made the story very readable and with a smooth flow, the challenge as I percieve it is to not use words like really, please, but, not such words can be easily used anywhere.

I'm not belittling your work but try to do it with a biographical aproach instead of fiction, that's a challenge
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Review of All I Really Want  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I rarely give 5.0s and yours deserved it, I wonder about most of those things and you put it beautifully. I also think that most of those are what most of people want, I am a pilot because I wanted to fly and I have a ver long goatie just cause I wanna be different, I have alot of things to change and wish for almost everything.

You expressed it in a way making people able to realte and thats the poetry I like most.

Amazing, Good Job

peace, out
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Review of Help Us Help YOU!  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
It is an informative column, I think we aren't doing enough to this great site and community. Did u think of adding an emailer in the "refer a member" I mean a place where u just type the email and a personal message and the person will be emailed.

Hi5.com did it beautifully, as they take ur email username and password for people who use hotmail and yahoo and such, and then let you choose people from your mailing list or address book. These people are all emailed and hence they increase their sites popularity.

at least just add the automatic mailer.
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Review of Monster  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I don't give much 4.5s and I think you deserve on, I think such hate lives in people's lives. I think that revenge feels sweet to them and that they think some people are responsibal or accountabl to other people's faults. Just like terrorist think the civilians are responsible for the army's actions.

I also think that the way you brought us to feel for this character is much the Godfather made us like mafia.

I unfortuantely think that if you told us the character was female it would have been better.

Overall, excellent piece.


peace, out
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