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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Very creepy story! I enjoyed the suspense, especially her not even considering that her own family would be part of the massacre.

The only thing I would have liked better would have been if the main character would have been refered to in the narrative, specifically anywhere others weren't talking directly to her, by her first name. Most people don't think of themselves with a title, and by using the title in the narrative, I think it puts the reader a little out of touch with the character.

Still, good job! Best of luck to you!

-rs
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