*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/rob2012
Review Requests: OFF
27 Public Reviews Given
80 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
1
1
Review of The Jesus Lizard  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Pinkies? Your writing style suggests a knowledge of (many) things pets, very humorous situations, and unsavory characters- who shouldn't really be hanging around animals. I remember my pets (I still have them, four cats and a dog.) Readers who own these little fuzzballs or scaly ones know your pain. Feeding them is such a hassle! I myself am a male, but I totally saw where the poor mother's fear came from.

So if you put "horror" as a genre it would work. Baby mice, much less frozen? Some Jesus lizard... Ha-ha-ha, I'm kidding. But seriously, five stars for a highly enjoyable story!

-R.K.
2
2
Review of Dentistry  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Well, finally an interesting vampire that doesn't involve romance (I'm talking about "Twilight")! This was a really great story with no structural issues to be found. Great characterizations, snappy dialog, and a dry humor throughout. I loved it! Keep writing!
----- Monsterman
3
3
Review of The Candy Store  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Swen rocks! I loved him (as a character) when his first line appeared! This is absolutely perfect on all levels! Characterization of the most humane, lovable characters I've ever encountered! The dialog is great! Your overall natural feel for writing draws the me in! I really couldn't help but smile through the entire story! Especially after Swen came in.

Great writing! Thank you for sharing, really, a bunch of chocolate thanks! :D
---- (Still with a stupid grin on his face) Monsterman
4
4
Review of Blossoms Maligned  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Normally I don't review stories, but this one was just too good to ignore. I've never had my heart pound like that. I think it's the fact that I'm a Senior in High School shoving the realism too much in my face. Either way the suspense when the gunmen appear (well done with them, keeping them hidden from the reader)..... it was absolutely twisted. Truly frightening. Also, highly unexpected, I didn't see it coming.

Characterization is great. Having a typical and highly realistic dialog line flow in it. No grammar issues or spelling issues. Just terror and more terror. You build the suspense to levels that may even exceed my own "Cabin 9" story. So thank you, for scaring me into nervousness tomorrow when I go to school. No story or movie has done that in a long time. Great job! Really great!
---- Monsterman
5
5
Review of Siren Song  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahoy! You are pretty good at poetry! Have faith in yourself. So on to the review: The title fits quite perfectly with the poem content itself, along with the emotion driven, first two stanzas. They also rhyme well. Although rhyming was almost immediately cut short with the last two stanza's it doesn't matter. They are like The Rocky Horror Picture Show where everything is catchy in a sing-song way. And that's what counts, it's not all about rhyming in poetry.

You convey a much lighter side to the dark myth of the Siren, which I enjoyed, and was drawn into within a few words. You have an intriguing way with words. I'd like to see more. Write on with the bright side (I'm normally for the dark)!
---- Monsterman
6
6
Review of I Love America!  
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: E | (5.0)
A perfect story for Independence Day! There are absolutely no problems in grammar or spelling, so all I can give is support. It's very apparent that you've lived here for a long time, in your voice. As you said that in the story.... (ranting always happens to me)! So are the love and confidence you have that we'll make it through. We've survived everything so far, America is the greatest underdog story. The true spirit of America, no matter how long it takes to get there, is in your powerful sword-like pen!

Write on and give people hope and belief!
--------Humbly,
Monsterman
7
7
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Aw, well isn't this an entertaining story! I love it (hence the high rating)! The title fits quite well with the story, which is great when it happens (not often). This is one of those funny cases like the movie Snakes on a Plane, where it's blatantly obvious what the entertainment is. The only thing I'd like to have seen is more on the rivalry between the two girls, maybe an event that went down in the school's history.

You're overall "voice" is quite comical in it's own way that adds to the humor. Also just enough description to grab readers with imagination's attention. Great job!
---- Monsterman
8
8
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Who in the Hell gave you such a meager grade of three stars?!?! This story is great and cute, and definitely for kids. I love the descriptions of a classic monster (not very original but still fun)! A great ending with an appearance of everyone's favorite candy... chocolate!!!! Great... this is the type of talent I wish would appear more on this site!

Have gracious amounts of chocolate and write for the kids!
-Monsterman
9
9
Review by Robert Kahil
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Brilliant beginning for a story, the suspense is well spaced. The characters are interesting. Although I don't think I myself would go into a gun store if the sign usually said Open and the sign is then the exact opposite. I think someone would've hesitated in a situation like that. Other than that, you have a good story... keep it up!
9 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 1 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/rob2012