The poem gives a strong message to the cruel, it makes an analysis of a cruel man. It dwells on the characteristics of a cruel man. The title seems to be apt for the poem. At some places one can see rhyming words. A pattern is followed for certain length of the poem and thereafter it breaks. A good read. Keep writing. Your writing matters.
Beautiful indeed! 'Quite the show', speaks about many colors of the earth. I liked the way in which it is presented each color speaking of its own role on the earth. There is imagery. Green speaks about the foliage, Blue speaks about the water, Red speaks about the sun,and white speaks about the snow. The nature is a wonderful muse for the poets. The nature exhibiting all these colors puts up a wonderful show!
A lovely picture of the blue sky is painted on this white canvas. The poem has a very good imagery. I loved the words painted celebration, a feather dusted breeze, newly scented compositions etc., The water color story is nicely presented and the poem portrays the early morning beautifully. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
Oh my God! It's a horror story with a sad ending. All that the narrator founded was the person who was guilty but for this he had to pay his life. The story is quite gripping and a cold wave runs through the spine, as we read the story. I enjoyed every bit of it. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
There is a strong message in the poem that pills are not good for health and the pharmaceuticals is controlling the population. It is a well written poem focussing on the devastating medicines that we take to improve our health. One day or the other it takes the toll. There is rhyme and rhythm in the poem. The last four lines are superb. Good job done. Your writing matters..
The feeling of the flower is agonizing. It bleeds as it is alone and has not grown up with the others of its own kind. It feels it is all alone to face the calamities of the nature. It has to undergo the pain all by itself. I liked the poem for it has emotions exhibited in a wonderful way. Keep writing. Your writing matters...
It appears to be a real life story that is fascinating to people who are suffering from mental illness. Creating a wall and lowering it at times is the need for all the mentally ill. That is what you want to say, I suppose. I really don't know what is Bipolar disorder, but after reading this, I got a vague idea of what it is. A loving partner, a satisfying job, good relationships with others is all that is required to lead a happy life. People who have been blessed with all that are the happiest. What else is required. Your article is an eyeopener. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
"You and your ways bewitching", is a beautiful song with good diction. I loved the words-debonair, scylla, courtesan, seductress etc,. There is both rhyme and rhythm in the poem. The description of the girl is highly romantic. Four simple stanzas conveys a lot to the readers. Keep writing...Your writing matters..
This kind of torture in a reality show should be highly condemned. It is not that anything can be included in a reality show. Just to create a kind of sadistic pleasure in the audience, I feel, they have administered a shock treatment to every wrong answer of the guy. It is good that you have written on this and made the audience aware of the severity of tormenting. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
The rhythm in the 'pinup girl' is superb. The last two lines concludes that Pinup girls are virgins and not whores, they are streetwalkers and not angels. I liked these two lines the best. 'Blinking long black lashes till someone shouts hey ragazza, bella' is a very attractive line and has impact on the readers. Overall a freely flowing poem that describes a PINUP girl very accurately. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
All our dreams, thoughts, voices, dances come upon the endless road. The start of the stanzas which says nothing is beginning, moving, struggling and dying has a deeper meaning of trust. Though nothing is moving, beginning, struggling and dying, the life is on only because of trust on each other. I liked the poem for the way it is presented. Keep writing... your writing matters...
These are very useful tips to keep our brain active. I fully agree with you that as we get older, our brain too ages. We especially start forgetting things as we get old and further to that we lose the grasping power. Reading, keeping in touch with the news, playing brain games etc enhance our brain and improves the brain power. Keep writing...Your writing matters...
"Things I Love" is freely flowing poem with simple words. The imaginations in the first stanza-I love to draw is super fine. I loved the the words-'It is like I'm a horse running running'. All the stanzas are neatly presented with free flow of words and finally it's summed up properly. Keep writing...
A wonderful rhyming poem that tells about a character that is going to fail in life. I loved almost all lines of the poem. It is correctly spaced and voiced. This tale can be further developed by including more personality traits of this character. Keep writing...Your writing matters.
Chef Rose's test is as amazing as the way the story is presented. I liked it because that the protagonist dosen't know it's a test and his natural honest and honorable behavior maks him to get through the test. The story has a good beginning, a good title and an appropriate end.
Imagery & Emotion:The twisted story of Red Riding Hood was a real enjoyable read. I loved the tone of the story but being inside a wolf's body and then getting free is slightly slimy both physically and as a story. But still I don't want to call it a godam story. I hope in the original story picking of marigolds is not there. Anyways I had a different feel and experience reading this story.
Imagery & Emotion:The poet is repenting for not writing a letter 10-20 years ago. He feels that if he had written this letter that day, he would not have seen a broken home, a sky of rain, nor cried, cried and cried.At the time, as children, when the home is verge at breaking, we would be so emotionally engrossed that we become inactive and would not know how to to react. A nice read. I would like to share such poems...keep writing..
Imagery & Emotion:I fully agree with you that time does not heal. Time takes different incarnations at different times. Sometimes, it is sweet, sometimes ugly, sometimes pretty and sometimes perfect. Whatever may be the time, it cannot make us forget the hurts that we have in our past o it may cause new harms to our lives or invokes revenges of past lives. Time cannot be believed. The best way to deal with time is, at every moment think the best.. When a past bad thought comes to mind, immediately get up, divert, and start observing your breathing. When you are laughing at a particular time try to laugh for some more time till it can last for some more time. When the time is hurting, close your eyes either sustain it or yell to your heights. Never supress your emotions. Emotions are not there to be supressed. Emotions are gifts of God to the human nature and we should feel every emotion of it. Emotions such as fears angers and depressions are to be dealt with tactfully. changing nto positive emotions, when a negative emotion occur is one such way.
Imagery & Emotion:Carrying the burden on the shoulders and enduring all the weight the girl loves Danny. Her love for his is stuck like glue. A romantic poem who can bear burden and weight for love of the beloved. Keep writing. Your writing matters...
Imagery & Emotion:We have to win everyone only by love and hate should not be for me. Rocks can melt with love that we show to them. God give me the strength that in future, I'll not do anything wrong because of the hate that envelops me. I pray God that hat should never even come near me and with love we have to strive for happiness, freedom, creativity, duty and discipline. Author has perceived the goodness of love and at the same time he should know the havoc that can be created by hate. a thought provoking write. Keep sharing...I love to read everything under the sun but have my my own opinions
Imagery & Emotion:On a pleasant lovely day, a lovely girl had dinner with me, chatted and laughed made me happy and was very generous to pay the bill even. She deserves a movie and a dinner for being so kind. Megan felt very nice about it and wrote a deserving poem that enchanted us. The poem has a rhyme, rhythm and a ecstatic outlook. I liked the pleasantness of the lovely day. As I read, I felt the emotions of Megan and was with him all through. A lovely write...Keep writing...
Bottling up the depressive emotions and emptying it in the night to create a space in the bottle for the next day is so touching and this is a common thing in most of the adolescents. Coping with distress, emotions is a great life skill that one has to develop. Disappointments, defeats, distress, sadness, not able to attract any of the friends are very dangerous and finally leads to loss of mental health. The author here is analyzed the situations meticulously and has brought out in greater detail how the little boy stores his emotions (strikes) in the bottle. The fault lies not in him but the environment creates situations. A great write. Keep writing and sharing...
Parenting the toddlers and teens is quite a difficult task. These days, children are very fast learners and they know how to teach their parents. We have to be very sensitive to what they talk. Today my seven year old daughter is quite upset with me because I showed her the dress material that I had bought for me. She did not want to talk to me because she feels I'm wasting lot of money on clothes. I tried getting a new dress for her yesterday. She denied it outright. She said " I have enough clothes. I don't want any more. stop wasting money on clothes." I don't know why she is worried about money and how I spend it. May be I have to learn economics from her.
Thanks for giving me an opportunity to read about parenting. The two year old is so sharp and knew how to avoid eating beans by teaching manners to her mother. I liked the article. Keep sharing...
Imagery & Emotion:The ardent request to his mother to be his always is the crux of the poem. The times when he wants his mother near are very crucial, I can say. He needs when he is sick and also when he is healthy, He needs when he brings a new someone, when he has grown old and he needs even after she's dead and gone. a mother is always a mother and cannot be substituted by anything in this world. The care and concern she shows at all times is unbeatable. No wife, daughter or sister can be so troubled as mother, when we are in crisis. I liked the voice of the poem, where we can see a kind of longing for mother. Well written. Keep sharing...
Imagery & Emotion:A great story. I loved every bit of it. Your voice strikes a chord in the heart. The story is related so perfectly well. It needs guts and a brave heart to get up from the hospital bed and go for a skiing competition. The competitive mind, a will to do something is all that we require in life. Winning or loss, becoming famous or not is secondary. Having a definite purpose in life keeps our life going in full zest. There we become strong, lovable and more humane. Being tormented for some with a belief to have cancer and later knowing that I'm free of it is a great relief. The relief that one gets cannot be explained in words. It's felt, felt in the heart. Keep sharing... I love your style of writing.
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Imagery & Emotion:The twisted story of Red Riding Hood was a real enjoyable read. I loved the tone of the story but being inside a wolf's body and then getting free is slightly slimy both physically and as a story. But still I don't want to call it a godam story. I hope in the original story picking of marigolds is not there. Anyways I had a different feel and experience reading this story.
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