Really cool story - partial to the layout too ;) Personally I haven't been in the mood to write but when I do I'll definitely follow-up on some of the storylines. Some real good ones here!
An interesting poem. I have mixed feelings regarding the doctrine of prayer. If things (like Revelations) are ordained and will happen and cannot be changed, what use is praying about not letting it happen? Either way interesting writing and I like the use of bold at the end.
("Did you guys not hear me?" Chelsy declared in disbelief. They weren't even paying attention to her.
Finally, Lori turned around. "What's your problem, Chelsy?" she snapped.
"My PROBLEM?" Chelsy reply hotly, "I tell you, I'm hearing VOICES, Lori! I hear a bunch of voices in my head!"
"You are seriously delusional." Lori concludes with a blank expression on her face.)
I thought this was part was well written. Though I would recommend more space in between sentences.
WOW! This is an amazing story! I really love the slow build up - as a reader its freaking awesome. For me as a writer I don't think I can take that long to build it up so I may just observe this story but again... WOW what an amazing start!
This was... interesting. Is there a political message with Big Bird and foreclosures? I'm not quite sure. I think this is satire... besides Master Chief would blow Mario out of the water. He's Spartan 117 and he kicks ASS. Clarification would be cool but I give you 5 stars anyway.
This is an epic tale... some of the quality that people write isn't that great though. Its cool that so many people have joined in but sometimes its better to edit heavily and restrict what people can do. That's my only nitpick. The fact that it has so many additions is amazing! Great work. :)
Can't believe I haven't rated this story yet! I love it. Fantastic story with a lot of great options and the author is flexible with what we can do for additions. Can't recommend it enough!
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