That was an awesome story. I loved reading it. Personally I love how you wrote it, and think that bringing Gibbs and Shannon back together was just beautiful. It was really an awesome story! Great work!
Wow, this was a trully beautiful poem. I think it was amazing, and I love the details in it. I can tell that a lot of emotion went into this. I hope that special someone loves the poem!
Nice, short poem. It was easy to understand, and it was rather dark. I personally liked the little end stanza, "Forgive yourself for what you have come to be", it was really different and set the tone of the poem nicely. Keep on writing, you're doing wonderful!
Another speach where you are wrong in. Homosexual acts are actually unnatural in the human body. They are created by the sex hormone in one's body (both men and women have it) going for a lustful desire towards another person of the same gender. It is a mental dehabilitation that is not easily avoided. Where yes, we cannot, ever, get rid of the rights for one person to love another, think about it. Does it seem right for a woman to have sex with a woman, or how about a man? A man's sex abilities are created to either a- get a woman (Notice- WOMAN) pregnant, or to give her a feeling of sexual feed. A woman is there to give the man the feeling of domination (Not in the instance of rape) and to make him overall feel good. So, tell me this- Where does homosexuality make sense here? Just wondering.
Wow. That was quite powerful. It was very strong, and imediately I was into it. Great work on the poem. It had a very decent flow, and reading it, you really got the message of the piece. Very nice way of stanzas, overall it's an exelent work. Great job and keep on writing!
Very interesting. I like your stye of writing, and the stanzas are very well written. I would advise getting rid of the punctuation. It kind of gets in the way of the flow of the poem. Other than that amazing work!
-Kris
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