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Review of My Life  
Review by drgn_kpr
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well expressed and visualized. Thank you sharing. Well done.
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Review of What have I done?  
Review by drgn_kpr
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
It amazes me when an author can tell a story so completely in so few words. Sorry for the lose that inspired this tragically beautiful thought. Pease be with you.
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Review of Economy Class  
Review by drgn_kpr
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That is good stuff. On a personal note, I flew for 20 years. I can't bring myself to fly now. You covered the reasons well.
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Review by drgn_kpr
Rated: E | (3.5)
Very interesting and with some work entertaining. Adding a setting, maybe a break room where the ideas (personas) can move in and out, interact. Or passing each other in a hallway, even a train platform any place with movement.

If you stick with the play concept add none speaking characters moving around to keep the allusion of activity going.

The personas can be represented with more characteristics to individualise each idea as a separate character.

This could easily be a skit or one act play. Keep playing with the idea. The basic premise is sound.
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Review by drgn_kpr
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This gives a clear image of both pain and survival. The subject is dark indeed. However, the survival delivers hope in the end.
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