First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work and being part of this amazing WDC community. Thank you for entering the Sensual Moments Weekly Contest. I'm this week's judge and as part of the process of naming a winner, I'll be reviewing each piece. This review is comprised of my personal insights and opinions - please take whatever is helpful and leave the rest. Good Luck! I'll be announcing the winner very soon!
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:A moving story about a couple and the news that they are about to become parents.
PLOT & CHARACTERS: Simple and direct with hints of a deeper connection between the couple. Karen and Jacob were believable and there were moments in the story that showed the depth of their emotions and bond.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:There were no obvious grammar issues.
FINAL THOUGHTS:Erotica is a difficult genre to write for anyone even the most experienced of writers struggles with it. However, if you are interested in writing in this genre i would suggest reading some of your fellow writers works and check out the other erotica groups. WE all work together to help writers like yourself. Good luck and write on!
I found your poem by way of the Random review link. When someone I noticed who the poem was by I couldn't help but read it. Nice job percy.Cute charming poem that makes you wonder. Hmmm what deed was done. Did Santa witness it or did he take part in it. And the answer is...lol
I am reviewing this beautiful poem for my group Sensual Infusion. You recently won our package in the Sinful Things auction. Congrats on the win. I to have a love for horses and always imagined myself owning one someday. Still waiting to win the lottery to see that dream come true. I loved your poem. I know both my reviews have been simple and short but its hard to find anything that needs improving with either piece.
I am reviewing this poem based on your win of my group Sensual Infusion's auction package in the Sinful Things Auction. This limerick was creative and funny given the subject lol. I hope you did well in the contest if not won it. You clearly have a sense of humor and it shined in this tidbit of sarcastic wit.
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work and being part of this amazing WDC community. Thank you for entering the Sensual Moments Weekly Contest. I'm this week's judge and as part of the process of naming a winner, I'll be reviewing each piece. This review is comprised of my personal insights and opinions - please take whatever is helpful and leave the rest. Good Luck! I'll be announcing the winner very soon!
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:Your story had a nice beginning and the characters were strong with room for growth to help move the story along.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:The plot started out strong and the sexual tension/atraction between your characters was believeable. However,towards the end I became lost as to where the story was heading. I didn't understand the meaning behind the final lines.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:Grammar aside, I would suggest re-reading your stories aloud if possible because sometimes what we hear in our heads from our characters doesn't always develop when written the way we thought it should. I hope that makes sense.
FINAL THOUGHTS:Good story and with fine tuning could be better. Write on!
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work and being part of this amazing WDC community. Thank you for entering the Sensual Moments Weekly Contest. I'm this week's judge and as part of the process of naming a winner, I'll be reviewing each piece. This review is comprised of my personal insights and opinions - please take whatever is helpful and leave the rest. Good Luck! I'll be announcing the winner very soon!
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:Intriguing story and it flowed nicely.I liked the pictures they helped me visualize the characters.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:The characters were believeable but I think the story needed more development in the plot. I was lost a little bit when Rindar rescued Volusia and her family from the wolf pack and then was taking them back to his cave in the next scene. What sign? You lost me again there or maybe I just didn't get it lol.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:I did see a couple of typo's read the story again I think you will see where I am talking about.
FINAL THOUGHTS:Overall an interesting tale and with abit more work you could have a fun story.
Hello and thank you for sharing your story with the Sensual Moments Contest. I am taking a second look at your story for the Dec. monthly round of our contest. I apologize for taking so long to send this review.
Your story Completing the whole was tender and emotionally charged. It flowed well and could envision the encounter between Anna and Dianne. I won't bother pointing out any grammar issues and such as i am sure the judge for the weekly round you won has already sent you an indepth review of this piece. It was nicely written and thank you for sharing it.
Write on and Good luck I will annouce a winner soon.
Sweet cute first meeting story. Have you tried branching out into writing the erotica genre. I think you could expand on the story above or write a new one with the same couple just spice it up.
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Awesome story great detail and the characters are very believeable. I fully enjoyed the story. You did a good job at using the prompt from the judge. Congrats on winning our first contest.
I am still new to the site and wrting reviews. I haven't figured out the review tool yet but working on it lol. Just wanted to take a look at your port and drop you a line or two about your work. This is cute story, the characters are believeable. I can see it as a picture book for young kids and would definately buy it for my girls. Thank you for sharing it. Write on!
Not bad would like to see more about Cass and Michael. With some work you could probally turn this into more then just a short story. The characters are interesting and the plot is good. Hopefully you are working on more to the story lol.
Wonderful story...very believable characters..I conected with Ellie she just came to life before my eyes. What is life without taking chances right? Keep up the good work.
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