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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
I'm good at...
short stories, novels, and blog
Favorite Genres
dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
Least Favorite Genres
romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
Favorite Item Types
short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
Least Favorite Item Types
poetry, campfires
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Romance, action-adventure, mysteries/thiller, science fiction
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Review of The Job Interview  
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In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm reviewing you short story on behalf of Sisco's Good Deeds Group.

This story is so good! I loved how you built up the anticipation! The twist at the end was great too. I think that you should try to make this longer because I think that it would make a great novel.

The only suggestion I have is to have a space between the paragraphs. This would make it easier to read.

Thanks for sharing this!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Little Dime  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm reviewing your poem on behalf of Sisco's Good Deeds Group.

I love the rhythm in this poem. I also like your use of repetition. This poem really reminds me of when I was a child, and I would tend to lose coins a lot and never understood why. The last two stanzas really brought those memories back, and now it makes me laugh.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi! I'm reviewing your contest on behalf of Sisco's Good Deeds Group.

I love this activity! I think that it is so cool to be able to write about the music I love without being made fun of. I also like the playlist that you posted on you tube. It's a great way to make all of the contest feel like winners already.

Good job on this activity, and I hope you run it for a long time!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi! I'm reviewing your flash fiction on behalf of Sisco's Good Deeds Group.

I enjoyed reading your flash fiction story. I read it thinking "okay, what's going to happen now". However, your ending was a little predictable, and I think you overused the dashes. The ending should have a twist to it like maybe something happening to the teacher, just a suggestions.

I hope this review helps!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Theia Mania  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm reviewing you on behalf of Sisco's Good Deeds group.

I liked the excitement that was built up in this poem! The middle part of the poem really drew me in with words like "enticing lovefeast".

The only suggestion I have is to make a note of what these words mean: Be'te-avon, and Bil-hanā' Wa Ash-shifā'.

I hope this review helps!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Peace  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*UmbrellaB*Hi MD Maurice ! This is a review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy. *UmbrellaB*


First Impression: It almost reads like a letter to a loved one. Maybe even a "Dear John" letter.

What I thought: I loved how you poured your heart out, revealing both love and disappointment. You also used imagery nicely in this piece too.

Suggestions: none

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/ect: no mistakes

In conclusion: I believe you could expand on this and make a great short story. Maybe even a novel. I also really like the next to the last paragraph when you described how the relationship went to ruin. The emotions came through very clear.

Keep writing!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Trust  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your decastich, Trust.

Did it follow the prompt? Yes, it has the ten lines required for a decastich.

Did it grab my attention? Yes, because of the message of the piece

My favorite line(s): The last two because they were the lines that brought the message of the poem to light.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Stake Deal  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your lune, Stake Deal.

Did it follow the prompt? Yes, it has the required three lines and the 5/3/5 syllable count.

Did it grab my attention? Yes, I love to read about card games.

My favorite line(s): The first one because it drew me into the piece.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of STARS  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your shadorma, Stars.

Did it follow the prompt? Almost, it has six lines, but the syllable count was off one syllable in the next to last line. The line was supposed to have seven syllables, and it only had six.

Did it grab my attention? Yes because of its lovely imagery

My favorite line(s): The first part of the poem.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of I Pledge  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your decastich, I Pledge.

Did it follow the prompt? Yes, it has the ten lines that is required for a decastch.

Did it grab my attention? Absolutely, this piece made memories come flooding back to me because I have had problems with eating disorders for a big portion of my life.

My favorite line(s): The entire piece. It was just perfect. I really liked the tone.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Jolted  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind of Matter Poetry Contest. I was certainly my pleasure to review your shadorma, Jolted.

Did it fulfilled the requirements of the prompt? Yes, it has the 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllable count, and the required 6 lines.

Did it grab by attention? Yes, I liked how you used panic and pain to draw the reader into this piece.

My favorite line(s): The first two because I can sorta relate to them because I'm going through an illness that is causes me to wake up with night sweats.

Thank you for entering the Mind Over Matter Contest. Good Luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a great contest for bloggers with terrific prizes for the top 3 blogs. I hope there's a huge turn out for this competition. I'm sure it will be a lot of fun. I love the last one you hosted.

Can't wait for the blogging fun to start in July!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Ginkgo biloba  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your haiku,Ginkgo biloba.

Did it follow the prompt?

Yes, it has the required three lines, 5/7/5 syllable count, and it's about nature.

Did it grab my attention?

Yes, the second line drew me in because fossils last for a long time, and time doesn't really affect it (as in not finding fault).

Suggestion

The third line kind of threw me off. I didn't quite get the comparison of the yellow foliage and a fossil. This is probably just me though.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of No Greater Love  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to reading your poem, No Greater Love.

Did it follow the prompt?

Yes, it followed the Easter prompt very well with great conviction.

Did it grab my attention?

Yes, I could tell this was written from the heart and with great faith. The rhyme scheme was also followed throughout quite nicely too.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Fall  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Mind Over Matter Poetry Contest. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your Haiku, Fall.

Did it follow the prompt?

Yes, It is about nature and has the 5/7/5 syllable count.

Did it grab my attention

Yes, I loved the dark imagery that you presented. To me, you also seem to use a little personification because it made me think of the leaves and branches taking the role of a person being depressed.

Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Town of Serenity  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the Rising Stars. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem.

I like the story in this poem. The subtle use of alteration and rhyme scheme are very good in this piece. This would make a great short story if you ever wanted to expand this. I could even see this making a good fantasy/horror story. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Need to Fight  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you courtesy of the Rising Stars. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem.

I love the boldness and passion in this poem. I can definetely hear this piece as a song. The imagery you present of fighting on a battle field is quite nice. The flow is great too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today because you entered the WDC Survivors. I'm a fellow contestant who's just here to cheer you on!

I liked the twist and turns in this story. I didn't expect the outcome at all. I only have one suggestion for this piece (and it's very minor).

"That would suck! Oh I hope that nothing like that happens. Oh the poor kids. This isn't their fault. Oh hon, do you really think . . .?"

You have some missing commas in this piece of dialogue. The commas are needed after oh.

Good luck in WDC Survivor and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I'm reviewing you today because I've come across your port and thought this was a neat piece. It has certainly been my pleasure to read this story.

You had me thinking all kinds of things while reading this story (and that's a good thing). I read this piece three times because I enjoyed it that much. I had a few minor suggestions that if you decide to change them will make the rating a four.

My eyes focus on my once porcelain hands now coated in a baked on brown red I know too well, but my mind will not let me recall the name of. I look up to see the splashes of red decorating the white sand in oddly memorizing and beautiful designs. I know what the red is as well, but the word escapes my grasp as I clutch for it. The sudden urge to stand over takes me and I am on my feet, spinning in lazy distracted circles to view the surreal scene of my surroundings.

Try dropping of from the end of the first sentence. It isn't needed. Try using another name for look.

Bodies, disassembled and disemboweled, are scattered everywhere for the length of my vision. The surf foams in pink puffy froth where the water has begun to drink of the devastation. Gulls and other scavengers settle up pieces of carnage further away from me than I could make in a single lunge.

A comma is needed after pink.

I look down to my hands, still curled and opened - readied to work again. Noticing for the first time since my world focused once more, the caked blood does not end at the wrist, nor even the forearm. I twist and turn to examine the extent at the wrist, nor even the forearm. I twist and turn to examine the extent of my coverage to find not a porcelain patch nor piece of clothing left untouched. My fingers tremble as I touch my face and feel the patterns of splatter covering my smooth face and matting my blond locks into place. My lips part in a gasp as my fingers find their way to their skin. Though now drying, the new color on my lips holds them together until I draw in the breath. The sudden hit of the salty air to my tender pallet renews the metallic taste.

Try using another word for look. You use examine twice in this paragraph. You also use twist and turn twice in this paragraph.

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Leprechaun Gold  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lord Norry Wolfsbane !

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What a lovely poem about a leprechaun. I liked the story you set to a nice rhyme and flow. I noticed you used the same ending words (except for two) for the middle stanzas. Was this on purpose or did it just end up that way? Just wondering, I thought it was cool. I liked the change of tone in the last stanza. Neat ending!

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Forbidden Feelings.

You had me really thinking while reading this poem. It turned out differently than I thought it would, but I like it when a title makes me think one thing when it's really about something else. After all, poetry should make you think. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Two Mothers  
Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Two Mothers.

I liked the fact that adoption in this case was successful. I only wished that my Dad could have experienced this as an adopted child. This poem is very touching and has all the right components that a poem needs. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your story, TMI.

I really liked the pace of this piece. The twist at the end was priceless. I didn't see that coming at all. I do have one suggestion as in editing this piece.

I fumbled to find the door handle, jiggling it accidentally as I grasped for it in the dark. It was unlocked and we slipped inside.

A comma is needed after unlocked.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Silent Seduction  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Silent Seduction.

This poem is hotter than a firecracker! I love the erotic imagery. Your use of alliteration is very good and works well in this poem. The flow is terrific. It rolls off the tongue beautifully. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Un Named Piece  
Review by very thankful
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of WDC Frontliners and because you gave me a review. It has certainly been my pleasure to review your poem.

I liked the imagery in this piece because I could picture a house being rebuild from the ground up. The flow is rather good in this piece too. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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