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#3610958

Review of R.A.Z.I. Ninjutsu Academy

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

I absolutely love the flow of this story, and how smooth one user's post goes in to the other. You guys are really skilled writers, and this was an absolutely great read. I did notice a few parentheses, which didn't really seem to fit the tone of the story.

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#3610747

Review of Online Safety and Identifying Hoaxes

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

I found this article very informative and helpful. I too think that people need reminding of security in the digital age; so much of it seems automatic to me. Especially now that children who never existed in the era of digital paranoia, threats to our privacy is greater than ever. A noble work, thank you.

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#3610723

Review of The Witch Sister

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

I really like the theme of this story. It's a lot of fun to play around with sadistic witch powers. I would recommend mandating which voice people use... That is to say first or third person, past or present. It really helps the flow of the story. Keep on writing, I really like it so far! And I even added a chapter of my own. ^_^

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#3609825

Review of Your Eyes Didn't Lie

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

I really liked this poem's theme... I feel like it's something that everyone can sympathize with. You did a wonderful job of displaying the emotions you felt over the course of this relationship, and it was vague enough that it was identifiable with anyone who has ever had a bad relationship. I'll be honest; I did have a little trouble finding a rhythm to fall in with. While this certainly doesn't make your poem bad (I really enjoyed it), it does make it a little hard to follow. Also, though this is the first of your poems I've read, I'd love to see you engage the senses a little more in your poetry. All in all, it was a really fun read. Thanks so much for sharing!

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#3606811

Review of Matching of Stray Souls

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

I think this story is absolutely charming. It's a really feel-good read. My one comment is that when Eric says "doesn't hold a candle to yours", it seems a little mature for his age. The language seems a little old for a six year old. The other thing, and I know this is for a flash story, but I would have liked to see a little more description. Other than that, it's a great, quick read.