I like the concept of the story. A blind man and a female ghost is an idea that I have not read a lot of stories of. I always enjoy dialog as it helps get the reader through the story and understand more about the characters. I would like to hear more about the blind man's thoughts especially during his intimate encounter. What was he feeling and thinking, did it feel real and did he have some questions about the encounter. That is just me though. I like the wordage you chose to use such as "His head was slammed against the ground and he knew no more." Overall I enjoyed the story and was wondering if you did plan on expanding the story and growing it into something more. If so, I would love to read more of the story!!
Good work and keep writing!!!
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