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Review of Major Tom  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Let me start by telling you are downright talented at the work of prose. "First attempt?" If that's no lie, I'm truly impressed.
"She's just another drug seeker." GREAT.

Two pretty big issues and a few tiny ones:
*The title lets us in on the punch line of the story. Any other title would work, just make it clever. A different line to the song that is less obvious maybe, or something about drug abuse?
*There's no obvious conflict. It sounds to me like John's lifestyle is set.

*Question: Why have you consistently capitalized "migraine?"
What's an MVA? You can get away with "Demerol" and "ER," but MVA is more difficult.
In the "no remorse" paragraph, if you could find a way to only use the word "need once."
After "recreational use," period or semicolon, not comma.

Still, you rule all. Congrats on a great piece!
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