God...that's awful. As much as I know, hear , read, have seen etc about sexual child abuse, it never gets easier to even think about. And its even worse knowing that what their capture does to them is what was also probably done to the capture at some point in their life...And the cycle continues and repeats. Its very rare when the chain is broken...Thank you for bringing this to attention even if it is so very difficult to read..
Technology has proven to be very useful in keeping connection with old friends and what not, though it also causes a big distraction for communication when people are interacting with each other face to face. I am torn because of this. But if people really want to and are determined enough to stay in contact with each other, I think they will no matter what. I enjoyed your piece though, it made me think and contemplate, and I didn't have to struggle in order to share my review. There are some sentence errors and well as puncuation that could be improved, but all around I enjoyed. Well done.
Well that is officially adorable. Very vivid to read, and the flow is well done. It says a lot when you fall in love with the characters and its only a 300 word count with only two words for dialogue. I think maybe there were a couple sentences which could have been shortened a little, but overall I really enjoyed this story.
Cute! I really enjoy it though I wish it was longer and there had been more to it! Personally I think you should pick this one back up and keep going with it, I'd like to know what else could happen. There are small punctuation errors here and there, but that might be something you dont think twice about, so to speak. But I really enjoyed this one, and that's not exactly easily achieved to good job.
That last sentence makes me curious as to whether or not she was implying that her telling him how she felt would be a burden or a almost "punishment" to him for making her fall in love with him by just existing. I think it would make an even deeper impression if that was the case. Good job!
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