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Review of Game Models  
Review by J. B. Clover
Rated: E | (5.0)
this seems like it could develop into a pretty decent story! so far, even with 10 paragraphs, it shows a lot of progression and backstory. i feel like you could develop the main character a bit more, as we don't have a name or age. it would also be useful to have some side characters or attachments that would either helpp him or keep him connected with humanity. i hope that you continue working on this story!
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