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Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
There were a couple places, I didn't understand till the end. I believe that's how you wanted it to be. I do have a tiny tear running down the corner of my eye. The love that a parent has for a child, no one can truely grasp. When you become a parent on the other hand, you understand, as a parent, and not as a child. Every child, even before they're a parent, have the voices of their parent's encouraging words, inside of them. That's how I got through my difficulies in life. I leaned on the teachings of my upbringing.

The point I was hook, line, and sinkered into your story, was one line. "The heart pulsed rhythmically matching the pattern". I had to know more from that point. I've been through car crashes, and tragic moments, where having a clear mind was vital. I felt like you delivered that line superbly on time! The most important thing to do in moment in moments like that, is to listen to your heart, and your heart said not to give up.

I hadn't cried at this point of the story, but there was another, one liner that jerked a tear from my eye. "When he visits. He reads to you."

When you explained that the magical horse's name was shadow. I immediatly pieced it all together. At first I thought maybe Kayla couldn't remember the name of her own horse Dancer, then I saw Shadow was the name of the horse her father imagined to wake her up. The father was willing to go into her imagination, and pull her gently back into that uncomfortable, and painful reality of her body laying on a hospital bed with tubes in her arms sustaining her life.

He loved her enough to go to her, and bring her back.


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Review of How I met My Wife  
Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem truely brought me to tears. The way you met, must have been God, because God truely can make an instant connection between two people, that never breaks. This reminds me of the scripture that says true love is stronger than death. I believe you're close to her every day, and she's close to you too. Maybe, you can't see her yet, looking in the curtain from the heavens, but she's there for you probably at the gates of heaven, in expectancy to see you standing by her in the living presence of the living God. Sixty eight years? Wow! You must have some great stories to tell, especially being graced to be married to someone who loves you equally as much as you love her. Equipollent love will change your life, your perspective, and your destiny. It's rare, uncommon, and highly sought after. When you find that kind of love, it's a hard fall with a good landing place, and when you land, you just wanna hug the ground they walk on, and never get up.

My favorite part of the story, is the way you wrote each other letters, and traded poetry with her. So sweet, and very touching within the inward parts of the heart.

The way you had to hide in the train, as not to get caught, is hilarious. And the beginning was unexpected. You thought you going over there to get your flirt on, and surprise, her dad invites into the family, and also she didn't hide her family life from you.

This makes me want to write about my adventures, because your story has touched my life unexpectedly.


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Review of Dear Me  
Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really find an enlightening interest in this article. The quotations you live your life by specifically. The quotes you spoke of, I haven't heard before, but as I found myself within these mottos myself, I would like to know the life stories, and the adventures each of these brilliant writers have faced. Most often, I think the joy of writing, and the passion of writing; often is birthed out of a storm. You have a joyful, youthful way of writing, and pertain to the senses of worth, and boldness. You could raise a debate, as to, what is going on in the nation, and why are there so many followers, and yet so few, so rare are the leaders, that lead by example. There are many that would present themselves as a leader, even take up a role, of being, what they might think a leader should look like, but what does a leader look like, and how would you pick out a great leader, out of the masses? That answer by itself, would solve so many questions about what's going on with the morality of the world today. I think, for myself, I could answer the question, but then for others, or to others that believe differently, would find it controversial. I believe it's this nation wide trend of wanting to be like. They think that just because they don't click, everywhere, then they click nowhere, or should just be left alone; creating inventive ideas, great imaginations, and inovative desires. I think many people once they discover these insightful, and wonderful gifts within themselves, they often think, they can now be liked for what they are able to do, rather than who they are.


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Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: E | (2.5)
I had to read this one a couple times before it clicked, because in the beginning I read it with a closed skeptical mind, and then I scrutinized my approach to it, and read it again with an open mind, in a more nonchalant approach. I found myself being torn pessimism, and optimism, and I was stuck for just a second; standing between the two perspectives, before it made sense. It's like looking at your life now, and using what you know today, as the lifeboat to predict where you'll be tomorrow, but it doesn't work, because living your life according to where you'll be tomorrow, pops your lifeboat every day, and leaves a flat tired out piece of rubber floating on the water as you try to drift through your day with your eyes on tomorrow. The goal, or the horizon wouldn't be to keep your eyes on the moment either, because if you live too much moment by moment; sometimes you miss opportunities that could benefit you in a great way for tomorrow, but you trade them for a momentary pleasure, because of a habitual habit of needing to have yourself in a comfortable place of knowing what's coming next. I would say the one living their life for tomorrow; for riches, for accomplishments, or expecting to glide up to a new level without any work, or effort on their part, would be the one where the sight of the horizon is impossible for them to see, because they're focused too far ahead; missing the beauty of the moment. I feel the one focused too much on the moment, is the one whom never touches the horizon, because they live sporatically flailing about without discerment of their character, or others, and they miss opportunities because of their concern with their own gain. The horizon must be the wall of understanding between pessimism, and optimism.


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Review of Smoke in The Wind  
Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: E | (5.0)
This person obviously means alot to you, and it feels as though you're writing from a place of personal experience. The ease of your words come from some place within, in my opinion; a passion or a memory. Feels as though the free spirit of the technique you choose to write in, is honest and vulnerable. You face discomfort, uncertainty, doubts, and awakened temptation to fears head on and directly. What you could choose to say in a few words, you elaborate on, and lengthen in a way, that keeps an ever slight pull on the mind's yearning, and want to learn more about this person; and the reason it inspires such poetical flow of conversation. It's not just words, not just a story even. It feels like the soul, laid open with a bright light shining forth. A light of intrigue, curiousity, and unearthed emotion. You are a writer that uses color between your words; places to rest on an idea, or to take a breath into, what otherwise might have been left to the short life of a passing thought. Yet, you were able to capture this thought, and bring us through this thought with you. This first page leaves so much to the imagination, and an imagination running wild into any area of the brain, I believe is what keeps readers, and writers of the like, coming back to your writing over and over, in the hopes of finding themselves somewhere within the memory, or imaginative state of mind you're sharing. It just has to be believable, and it is. I would like to see more of your writings. I'm new to this sight, and through it I'm learning how to connect with those with similar passions, and those moving in similar directions with their life, and writing. It' quite inspiring to read such a glimpse of your story, because it's the glimpses of fleeting thoughts, and memories, that have the most impact. It's the chances not taken, words left unsaid, opportunities that were just barely out of reach; that we're consumed with the ideas, imaginations, and dreams of later in life.


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Review of For You  
Review by tiger_cub4u_1
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful poem of heart and character. I like how it ended by making a choice rather than leaving it a question. I also enjoyed the rhythm of the way it flowed back and forth ebbing on each emotion till it expanded into a long awaited question, and I was placed backwards in my past for a moment having been through a similar battle. I would like to encourage you to keep writing and speaking on behalf of your heart because it's a beautiful place to be invited into for a time of glympsing upon your own personal experiences which are also memorable and relatable probably to anyone I believe who has had to walk through any kind of situational nature as you've endured. I was intrigued the way this poem twisted ever so slightly into an exact point that in the end you realized for yourself without the help of anyone that you deserved more and were worth more than you were being treated as and you made a clear drawn line that you gave him a set time to get things together and from the looks of it it appears from where I'm standing which is from the outside looking in, that he wasn't quite able to reach that bar you raised and you found yourself by losing him for a time. In an essence you found more than just yourself, you found your voice to speak of what you desire from him.


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