Hello there Solaris! This is me, Treevis121, reviewing your work of poetry that I have enjoyed. The feelings of a new world spread out in front of you can be overwhelming, frightening, exciting or confusing depending on which way you look at it. Your poem focuses on the fears of leaving everything you know behind to start something new, yet also tells how there can be a silver lining to it all if you just break away from all of your troubles. I enjoyed reading it, yet the actual message being conveyed wasn't being told when you break away. There are a few grammatical errors, such as "My School, My Friends, My HOME?" Be sure to correct those for all of those future reviews. In all, the poem was pretty well done with a message being conveyed to readers.
It's such a chilling realization at the end... There are almost no amount of words to describe it, but it was nevertheless startling. I enjoyed reading it a lot, but in your ninth paragraph at the first word, replace the period with a comma. I assume it to be a finger slip, but once that's fixed up it'll be almost humanly perfect! Thank you for the great read!
Those were pretty rough times for the Native Americans being forced to leave their land like that, not to mention the trek being unbearably long and harsh. Maybe if things were done differently, the indians wouldn't have to go on the Trail of Tears... Your item reflects their journey; work a little on capitalization, like 'Europe'. Other than that, great item!
Hey, like I e-mailed before about this, it's fun and enjoyable, and lets the reader choose what the character should do. I'm glad the item had the opportunity of letting the reader choose who to be with the 'Reader's Choice.' Expect me to partake in other items that you have made! ;D
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