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Review of Ch.1 The Oak Tree  
Review by Velink
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
your writings are very good. But the story might need some adjustment, I guess. It's up to you whether to change it or not.

at para 4: She had been getting ready for school before then, because she wore ....

I think it would be better if it's changed to:
before then as she wore ....

para 5:This is my house(,) not yours

Para 8: You never (give) me anything else
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