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Review by The Raven
Rated: E | (3.5)
If this is a first attempt at exsizeing (getting rid) of your pain--- well i am astounded! There are a few technical mistakes whicj I dont really want to go into as I KNOW how difficult to express such things are.(read "This" in MY portfolio)I too turned to poetry as a forn of healing.However, if you are thinking of someday publishing as I am you'll want to use spellcheck as often as possible. As to the structure you have chosen what is called a "quatrain" (consists of 4 lines to each stanza) (paragraph) so you will need to add two more or take these two out entirely) lines to the third "stanza" Personally I would take them out as they just overburden the "flow" to your poem. and THAT is excellent up to that point! rythum is just a BIT off and nothing to worry about you'll get it in time. You have a "natural" talent for this and I truly hope you continue with it! Check out a few of mine and you will see that we are indeed kindred spirits here! WRITE ON!
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Review by The Raven
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Well all in all it's good advice, but as an article you need to pare it down some. Try not to be redundant(as in repeating sentances too often).And a good practie(I know I know I do it too)Try to watch the capitals. where and when they are nessasary. But as I said this contains good advice.
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