Hello! I am impressed by this haiku poem. The whole stanza can be read as a complete sentence while fitting the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. I believe adding a period at the end of the poem would be the cherry on top. It would complete the poem the same way it would a story.
When I first read this haiku, I immediately related to your feelings when writing poetry. It can be extremely difficult to fit syllable and rhyming patterns together while trying to convey a clear message. That I can tell you from experience. Again, well done on this haiku! Good luck on your future writing projects.
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This is the most amazing story that I've read all year! I couldn't stop reading it. I didn't see any errors in spelling or grammar, so that makes it even better!
I wish you luck on your future writing projects, and have a happy new year!
I like the idea for this monologue, but instead of 'ahead' you should write 'a head'. That will make a better hook to attract future readers and it makes more sense with the context. Other than that, this monologue is pretty interesting.
I am really impressed by this monologue. This actually seems like something an insomniac would do whenever they're wake. Being an occasional insomniac myself (especially when I was in elementary school) I've had my experiences and I can completely relate. I don't see any errors that need to be corrected, so this is an extremely good piece. I hope you enjoyed writing it and that you continue to enjoy writing in the future.
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This story has potential, but there are a lot of things that need to be fixed. Break apart most of the sentences into smaller ones and leave out the parts that appear more than once. Also tell the reader why Ka:u set Kamin on fire and sent the villagers and Utin running. Give the 'Rocky' near the end of the third paragraph a lower case 'r', that is unless it is the name of the stream. There are countless grammar errors, but with a little proofreading and editing it can be fixed.
This item has a great story to tell. With the editing it can be made better.
I hope you found this review helpful in this and your future items. Keep writing and have fun at WDC!
This is an amazing poem. I love how you describe the presence of your guardian angel and I don't see any spelling problems. Well done! Good luck with your future writing projects!
This is a really good story. You did very well of writing the plot, but there are a few punctuation errors. However everything else is perfect. Keep up the good work and have fun at Writing.com.
I love the story behind this poem. However there is a problem with the fact that there is no punctuation. It was difficult to tell which part began and which ended. You should try to find out how to properly punctuate in poetry such as this.
I still love the story depicted in this poem. I also admire how you use pattern in this too. Keep writing and learning from mistakes. These are the best strategies used to improve your writing. Therefore keep up the great work!
I really like how this poem is constructed. It has a strong hook and theme. The spelling is perfect! It makes it easy to read. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
This is a very good preface. I like how you describe the narrator's experience of turning into a fairy. I can see it in my head as I read it. Great job.
This is a lovely poem. I like how the narrator addresses his love of his loved ones in the end. However I would like to see how people show their love for him after his death.
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