Overall Impression: I loved this. It had me smiling the whole way through it. I particularly liked the part about "junk".
My favorite part was 'A drunken loser in a smoky bar trying to hit on some girl…"Hey baby! can I go through your junk?" Or, even worse… "Every woman’s junk is one man’ s treasure." ' It was funny and descriptive. You've written a wonderful piece.
Overall Impression: This was extremely well written. You describe the events wonderfully.
Suggestions: None it was perfectly written I didn't see any typos, or other writting errors.
I really enjoyed the part when you spoke about how you had new eyes for tennis. You gave it a second chance and now it seems to me that your great at it.
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Overall Impression:This was funny. I enjoyed reading this. The title fits it perfectly. At first I wasnt sure what it was suppose to be but it got me grinnin' pretty quick.
Suggestions: It would have been better if it was a little longer. Maybe talked a little more about the game that was being played. Other then that it was a great read. I also liked how you put the pictures in with it.
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Overall Impression: This is a perfect imagery poem. You bring to life the memories you wrote down in this.
What I liked: You can really feel the way you feel when you read this. That's what a poem is meant to do. I see no grammer or punctuation errors. I think this is perfect. Great job.
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Overall Impression: This is a very inspirational piece. It really gets into another view of life.
What I liked: I liked how you expressed the winds fondness of the memories she holds and carries. I think this is wonderful. You've written it very well.
Suggestions: I think it would have been a little better had it been longer. It's good though as it is.
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Overall Impression: Loved this, smiled the whole way through.
What I liked: The whole thing I can't just pick out a line or two. It goes together so well. You're a wonderful writer keep up the good work.
Suggestions: None don't change a thing. It's a great poem with a great title.
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Overall Impression: I absolutly loved this poem. It's perfect.
What I liked: It brought back so many memories of chasing and catching fireflies. Watching them all night. Wonderful job, I loved this. Thank you for the great read.
Suggestions: None it's perfect. Wouldn't change a thing.
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Overall Impression: It's obivious of the love that's in this poem. It must have been written for someone very special.
What I liked: How you've described how love and pain go together hand in hand. Great job.
Suggestions: I would take out the line People who have yet to see what love is. It just doesn't fit in with the rest of it.
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Overall Impression: I thought this was beautiful. Great job.
What I liked: The wonderful ryhme and rythem that went along with this.
Suggestions: I would change this from other to poetry. Then the sub topics to religous and inspirational. You'll get more views that ways. It describes it much better. Wonderful job.
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Overall Impression: The indiviual poems are wonderful.
What I liked: The great ryhme and rythem to them.
Suggestions: You should write each one on a seperate items and make a folder of your poems. Also go through them and capitialize all the "I's" work on grammer and punctuation a little more.
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Overall Impression: This is a deep poem.
What I liked: The beginning of it. It leads you into thought.
Suggestions: There really should be more.
When I read the first two lines I was wanting more. The last line kind of threw me off. I was expecting a deep philsophical poem, and this is a great start to one. Write more and it would be perfect.
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Overall Impression: I thought this was beautiful and heartfelt poem. you've expressed yourself well.
What I liked: The imagery great job.
Suggestions: You misspelled sore several times you put swore instead. Also you repeated my eyes are red and sore to many times. Writing poetry takes time. Keep up the good work.
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Overall Impression: I really enjoyed the sentiment of this poem.
What I liked: You've done a great job on puntcuation. Which I have a big problem with, so I'm impressed.
Suggestions: You shouldn't end two lines back to back with forever. It doesn't mesh well. Other then that it's great.
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Overall Impression: I loved this, it made me smile and laugh.
What I liked: How you even mentioned the chili cheese. Great job.
Suggestions: Capitialize the first word of every line and use punctuation you'll get better ratings that way. ONce again great job. Loved it.
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Overall Impression:I like the depth of this poem.
What I liked: It's sentimental and really expresses the way you feel.
Suggestions: You try to keep the rythem going but it breaks in a few places, try a typical ABABAB poem where the a lines ryhme and the b lines ryhme.
Overall Impression: I thought this was really good. Don't come across many poems about Klingons.
What I liked: The comdey in this piece was really good.
Suggestions: There are some places where the rythem breaks I'd try tightening some of the longer lines or lengthening the shorter ones to make the more even.
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Overall Impression: This is really sweet. I enjoyed reading this it made me smile.
What I liked: I really liked the second verse when it's talking about how they feel they are the only two people. It shows how most couples really do feel about one another.
Suggestions: None. Happy Writing!
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Ok once again could be great. Poems are lined and we don't know where the lines are. Like for example
I stand tall againest the light, everything follows through
You know light made darkness, from one of it's shadows
A dark mind knows no boundry
You get the idea. I'm going to give you the rating it would earn if it were cleaned up a little don't give up on it. Keep writing. This is not a rating it would normally recieve as is but what I think it could earn.
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Overall Impression: This is a perfect imagery poem. You bring to life the memories you wrote down in this. 
What I liked: You can really feel the way you feel when you read this. That's what a poem is meant to do. I see no grammer or punctuation errors. I think this is perfect. Great job. 
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