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a sonnet reflecting on the choices/paths we make/take
The Path Less Travelled

O, Path Less Travelled, you beckon to me,
Much overgrown with thorns though you might be.
Yonder paths flow wide and arrow-true straight,
But you, dearest Path, most wretched do snake
And falter at most inopportune times
And oft meander at a whim, then whine
When upbraided for leading me astray,
At which you refuse to lead for a day!
Yet fain would I struggle on you e'er more
And discover joys and sorrows in store.

"'Ware of paths too narrow and straight,'"I say,
"Path full capricious, pray you, lead the way!"

A Shakespearean sonnet written in iambic pentameter.  I had originally written 'thou' and 'thee' for some of the 'you's.  Should I keep them or change to 'you' as I've done here?  They would be in keeping with the 'yonder', 'oft' and 'fain', but would that be too much? I've been told most people do not like archaic speech, but I'm wondering if that's true. Here follows an almost identical sonnet, this time written in iambic tetrameter.  Which is better? More appealing? Less annoying? :)

The Path Less Travelled

The path less travelled beckons me
O'ergrown with thorns though it might be.
Other paths may flow wide and straight,
This here path full wretched doth snake,
Falters at inopportune times,
Oft meanders at whim, then whines
When crossed for leading one astray
Refuses to lead the next day!
Yet fain would I toil on thee e'er more
Discover joys and sorrows in store.

''Ware paths straight and narrow,' I say
'Path full caprious, lead the way!'
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