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Rated: 13+ · Poetry · Nature · #2225550
I wrote two lines 7/7 in response to other peoples hokku for a June 2020 contest.
Is there a season implied not stated?
Is an emotion evoked rather than stated?
Is there a juxtaposition of images?
I left out capitalization unless it's a formal name.
I did not include titles ... that's a very western concept.
I did the best I could if I wasn't certain of time, place or specifics.

Since rengas can be a type of 'parlor game' I'm trying to respond as quickly as possible. I suspect originally there was little time to edit unless poets were sending messages back and forth by letters and they just may have been!

Do note: this may look like a tanka but when there are two or more poets writing, a renga goes off in a direction that the poet who starts it doesn't intend. My responses therefore are MY responses. *Shock2*

Ah... and to write my own quick American hokku:

#0

peonies glisten
walking through heavy sweetness
two drenched surfboarders


                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani (Montana)

#1

low gunmetal skies
poets threatened with downpours
chilly winter's wind

                   Elle - on hiatus (North Island, New Zealand)

across tranquil sunlit seas
my lover smells pressed flowers

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#2

shade of giant tree
lacy shadows cool poets
summer parasol

                   Tinker (No California)

we swear at bold mosquitoes;
our pencils stab blank papers

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#3

in the Sar river
the grey granite Madonna
heralds the solstice

                   ridinghhood-p.boutilier (about NW Spain)

I watch a lone child searching,
tadpoles and glass his treasures

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#4

howl of cicadas—
we, wordsmiths all, shake with beats
of drums, dream of home

                   concrete_angel (memory of Japan)

back home under a blanket,
air conditioner full blast

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#5

sultry summer eve
underneath my Linden tree
dusky balladry

                   Eric Wharton (Mississippi)

twin boys run through long shadows;
grandmother calls them to bed

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#6

novice builders
under a forest's hot sun
a shed raising

                   eyestar~* (Canada)

one plank, one nail at a time;
a new refuge for chipmunks

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#7

VA hospital
constant refuge for wounded
safety net for vets

                   Dave (South Carolina)

hot winds, cold winds, under tall
loblolly pines, cool breezes

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#8

glorious buds bloom
like virtuoso voices
singing sacred psalms

                   Rhychus (?)

linens flap, dry on the line
cleansed of the runt cat's present

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#9

summertime musings
ebb and flow on a sea of
creativity

                   Nani - Blessed Indeed (SW Georgia)

red soil clings to little ones
until baptized, rinsed and dried

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#10

dogwoods blooming free
redbuds coloring the world
daffodils sprouting

                   Lisa Noe (SE Kentucky)

'neath the brows of black mountains,
miner's shed blood for their rights (June 1973)

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

#11

Blue skies hold crisp air
tall mountains look to their feet -
garden of poets

                   Writer_Mike (Colorado)

evening primroses open
as notebooks are put away

                   Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

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