I Write - Decade Edition - Roaring 20's

Trianglet Attempts - God

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The Trianglet is an invented form contrived by Mina M. Sutherland. The structure consists of ten lines with syllable counts of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1, and a rhyme scheme of AbcxddxcbA, where x is unrhymed and upper case A represents a repeated line/single syllable word, as described and demonstrated in the following links:

https://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/tag/10-lines/

https://darksideofthemoon583.com/2018/01/12/10-line-poem-challenge-13-trianglet/...

God
Immense
Life giving
Sustaining faith
That guides me forward
Open seas toward
A place of peace
Thanksgiving
Intense
God.

This follows the pattern, but is it good? I am not happy about the repeat of giving, but God does give a lot and he gives life as we thank Him for it.

God
Immense
Life giving
Sustaining faith
That guides me forward
Open seas toward
A place of peace
Good living
Intense
God.


Let me know which one you like. They've been growing on me.