It really is a beautiful piece as it stands, but yes for the purpose of this contest, it is the last paragraph that really puts it over the edge into more commentary than setting description. Describing setting in a story is something I see ignored or really minimized in a lot of stories, so my goal is this was to offer a way to practice showing us a place - though of course human emotions enter into that.
-Laurie
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