Tobber, I read your piece and absolutely LOVE the theme. However, with an etheree poem the syllable counts should be... 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10. The syllable counts in your poem do not follow this pattern. I love the theme and the rhyme scheme, if you would like to edit the piece I will review it then.
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