~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

Thank you......
I was pretty sure the last line wasn't quite what it should be, but I didn't want to lose the imagery.

Appreciate your patience with my persistence as well as your suggestions.
I don't know when I've worked so hard on a poem - you offer so much in the way of education. I am assuming as well as being an author you are a literature educator too.

Thank you for your interesting lessons and exceptional willingness and ability to teach!

Sabaka

PS:I played around with syllabic combinations as a result of this lesson and came up with this 12-11-5-5-12 combination: "Out with the old"  and entered it into the Newbies Only Poetry Contest. Is this a defined form?