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 |  | Force of Nature  [ASR] You are at the mercy of the elements.  |
| (4.5)  When one tugs at a single thing in nature, he finds it attached to the rest of the world. -John Muir- I am here to give your piece,  "Forces of Nature" a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!! "Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points) Beautiful!! I loved the style you wrote this in... (If I have time, I'd like to try it.  )Your use of words and phrasing were good and helped the flow of the piece.  Grammar/Punctuation/Rhyme Pattern -- All Superb and Consistent!!  "Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points) I wouldn't really say it's a weakness or anything... but I thought... or felt like there could be another stanza either before or after the last one... to make the ending stronger. (Or I may be just crazy and others or yourself may think differently... *more blush*)"Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions) Nothing aside from what I said above.  "Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter) I love the way you wrote this poem... Your words, negative because of the 'destruction' in them... But also loving, comforting... giving everyone a warning-- a warning to treat nature better.   "KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING"~mARi~
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You responded to this review 04/30/2010 @ 11:25pm EDT