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![]() | Liar ![]() Flash Fiction entry 23/4/12 ![]() |
Hi, jadelette I found out your name on the "Invalid Item" ![]() so I looked up one of your stories ![]() ![]() ![]() This is a story of jealousy and betrayal, played out in a piece of flash fiction that is a very satisfying read. The emotions of the central character play a large part here. Her two closest friends, Anton and Jenny, have formed a deeper bond of love. She feels left out, betrayed. Jealousy of their relationship leads to an instant of behaviour where she seeks revenge, leading to tragic consequences. I enjoyed reading this tale which, though short, has all the elements a good story needs. ![]() The story is told from the 1st person POV of the main character, who is only identified as the 'liar'. The other two characters, Anton and Jenny, are thinly described in terms of how they affect the 'liar's' emotions. In a very short story this is to be expected. The pace is brisk, as the story begins with the 'liar's' feelings after her actions. Then, in 'flashback', the emotions she undergoes that motivate her are described and, finally, the lie that she tells that bring about a dreadful consequence. What little dialogue there is in this piece is well executed and believable. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() My opinions may not coincide with yours and that is fine, please feel free to ignore any suggestions you don't want. We are all of us on a learning curve and only you can decide what is best for your story. Regards sandybays ![]() ![]() ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" ![]()
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