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 |  | Chained  [E] Set in the 1950s, a man longs for a past love.  |
| **Image Unavailable** Hi Jaye P. Marshall  , I'm sad to see the white case. While I never had a chance to know you, I write this review in tribute to you.I'm just dashing through with a review! Plot/Premise The plot for this is excellent and sweet. I found myself following the main characters story and my heart soared and dropped with his. What a beautiful story. I don't normally ready romance - I tend to avoid it. But this is a beautiful story. Character(s) I found myself liking both characters who are polar opposites. Willy is simple but sweet, and wise in his own way. Eileen is a sweet teacher who lives with their family for a school year. Dialogue The dialogue is great, rich, and well done. GMC GMC: Goal, Motivation, Conflict is what drives characters and your story forward. Goal = To profess his love to Eileen Motivation = love Conflict = he's unsure if his love will be accepted or returned. The GMC in this story is very good and something anyone can identify with. The universal themes of love and lost opportunity are both great choices. Setting & Description The settings and description are very clear, painting a picture for the reader. Word Choices The word choices are proper as well. There's some adverb usage that could be improved but otherwise, the writing itself is tight and concise. Show/Don't Tell / The Dream This is very well done and without any deviations. The story's dream flows perfectly without any bumps or disruptions. Tips, Tricks, & Tidbits This is a great, rich story with universal themes that would appeal to any reader. The ending is bittersweet and melancholy, which is perfect. I loved reading this! Gotta run, but this was fun! Need a review? Submit a bitem link to "Invalid Item" Need something to review? Access my portfolio showcase here. Items are ordered newest to oldest in each category:
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