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A Breath Away ![]() A night anxiety snuck up on me. ![]() |
Hello MirandaCookies IS IN COLLEGE ![]() ![]() This is your local and frolic like Sb here. I came across your item randomly and I'm reviewing for The Angel Army. Let's get rolling! Corrections/Suggestions ![]() ![]() Rhyming/Rhythm ![]() This was a free-style poem that moved very quickly and had a nice pace to it. I feel like anxiety poems generally do read a little faster, like our thought process being like a caged rabbit that can't escape. So, this fit the mood of your poem perfectly. The only part that it hitched only a little was the one stanza I mentioned above. There is a bit of rhyming near the second to last stanza which was smartly done and definitely added to the smoothness of reading it. ![]() I really loved how you have such an emotional impact with this poem. I could definitely 'feel' what you were writing, if that makes sense. Like I said before, I can and have had quite a bit of anxiety when I sleep at times. The head racing, heart-pounding, blood turning to quicksilver it seems. You convey this well and strongly. You also finish it strong with the hanging up, whispering apologies, this is really great. Overall Comments Overall, I really enjoyed this poem of yours! I have to come back to read more of your writing and I'll be sure to favorite you and this folder to see what you add to it. This was a strong delivery of emotions with this night anxiety that you suffered from. There are a lot of favorite lines with this and I'm glad I came across it. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ![]() ![]()
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