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 |  | The Summer People  [E] A boy comes of age in a city beyond his dreams.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: This was a beautiful story. The setting was vivid and quite unique, and I had no difficulties imagining the scenes. I enjoyed the language which fit the tale very well. It was lyrical but not over the top, and phrases like fish wiggling in his belly were both appropriate for the characters and very descriptive. Atony’s innocent romance with Seuna was sweet and believable. He was a great character; curious and proud of his family’s job, and not easily intimidated, even if a beautiful girl made fun of him. What happened to the two of them was left deliberately ambiguous, and I can see two different interpretations. Perhaps they literally sailed off to explore the world together. Or maybe they were taken by the wisps and passed into the spirit world - a spiritual transition, in a way. The readers get to choose which one fits better, or which one they would prefer. I like the second one, and perhaps at least one of them returned in the end when the single wisp danced above Seuna’s mother’s head.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I only have a few minor suggestions: “They don’t look like us, right pappa?” I believe you need a comma after “right” to set off the direct address, and I believe “Pappa” should be capitalised as he is using it like a name. They are ever over the horizon in their sandskimmners Later on, you called them “sandskimmers” so I think this was a typo. Atony went with the Seuna “the” is redundant.  Final Thoughts: This story had the tone and depth of a classic myth or fable, and I especially enjoyed the world building and learning about the characters’ cultures. I felt for the father who spent a long time looking for his son, and it seems like there will never be a truly happy ending for him, even though in the end, he might have started to come to terms with his loss. A great read!
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