Hello,

This is certainly not surreal - it just uses a metaphor...

And the rest comes across as a list of plain statements, without any explanation or justification given, which also lacks poetry.

The grammar is poor and needs work on.

I must say, the sentiments expressed seem odd to me. Maybe, you are referring to a particular country or regime? In the intro, you say 'our life', so perhaps retitle 'our world is a prison'? And give more details in the poem. If you've got something to say, than say it, poetically of course.

Good luck with the writing...............Em