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Undying Oath Open in new Window. [ASR]
A poem based on the love story of Romeo and Juliet.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

A poem inspired by that star-crossed couple, Romeo and Juliet.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the word play and the rhythmic flow of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 4 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme. Well done.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest making the font bigger so it's easier to read on the WDC website.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Their love was fire, fierce and bright, A stolen spark in endless night. I think this description describes the power of love, how it can be intense, and how young lovers will seek it out even under the cover of darkness to just to experience the highs of the emotion.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in with a nice rhythmic flow and keeps them reading. The title is from what the poem implies. The poem tells the story of Alessandro and Francesca well.

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