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 Sea Swallow Me Open in new Window. [13+]
Sail on and on
by zeni Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Zeni, and welcome to writing.com!

I found this by using the Random Read and Review button.

I love the artistic, innovative, yet timeless and relatable metaphor you've used. We see the narrator lost at sea, adrift and clinging to the hope that shines in the daylight hours. Yet in the darkness of night, with nothing there but invisible fishes, the end feels like a solution to whatever suffering is going on. Oh, to be a fish, whose home is the sea! We humans are not at home on the open ocean...

I'm a little bit reminded of the old phrase "plenty of fish in the sea," but you've given it enough polish so that it doesn't have to be exclusively about the loneliness of not having a mate. I love the balance of descriptive lines: sunset is "Earth's natural light switch," and thunder is "Earth's natural jump scare..." You speak of God, and I feel your faith coming through the poetry.

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I'm very happy I've met you today. Your poetry is beautiful and thoughtful.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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