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 A Clean Escape Open in new Window. [E]
A Flash Fiction Contest Entry, trying to keep the writing cogs turning.
by L.A.Saxe Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, sir!

I noticed this on the sidebar and thought it looked like a nice quick read. I love flash fiction because, even if it's a subject matter I don't especially care for, it's over quickly and I don't have to waste too many brain cells fretting over it. This, far from being dark and gloomy, is a delightfully witty piece where we can root for the escapee and chuckle at the inherent pun in his mode of egress.

The setting is vaguely ancient, with dungeons and harsh punishment, yet satirically modern, with lunch hour and a jangling cleaning wagon. It invites us to consider societal norms and the complexities of justice... If we cared to bother. Otherwise, it's a lighthearted, tongue in cheek, and kid-friendly short that would make a fun bedtime story.

You've used nice clear font with good paragraph spacing, making an easy reading experience. I would give a couple suggestions on presentation to potential readers: your subtitle and primary genre are enough to have the item slide into the dust, unappreciated. Do try to actually describe what the story is about, in a teasing way, in the subtitle. And the primary genre could at least be Drama, or Action/Adventure, or Crime/Gangster, or Fantasy, or Folklore, or even Philosophy. Anything but Contest Entry *Crazy* Ok, rant over.

Loved this! Glad I noticed it *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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