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 | Tick  [E] Covering clothes are worth it.  |
| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYOur narrator borrows some old clothes from her sister for a hike.  WHAT I LIKEDWhat really works with this flash fiction is the moral of the story. I saw a lot of common sense being used, which is rare, but also, being prepared will keep someone safe. Good use of the prompt to tell a story that had a point without being preachy.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the first person from our narrator's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThe dialogue accents the narration and captures the prompt of the story well. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening paragraph engaged me right away. I wanted to find out what would happen next as if I didn't know... CHARACTERSThe narrator is a very practical person with a lot of common sense that I think connects with readers. Also, I like the sister because she's "everybody's sister," in a way and connects with readers on that level. FLOW & PACINGIt's perfect. There's a solid beginning, middle, and end. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title sets the expectations of the story well. Good storytelling elements in a short fiction. Leaves you with a simple message - Common Sense will never fail you. An Angel Army Review
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You responded to this review 08/11/2025 @ 3:58pm EDT