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The Big Dig  [13+] Archeology shows a cycle we are doomed to repeat  |
| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYAn Archeologist on a dig is quite certain of what he's found...  WHAT I LIKEDI liked how the archeologist slowly revealed the map. What one thinks may not be what "it" is.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 3rd person limited from the archeologist's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThe dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening paragraph intrigues the reader with it's quote about war and patience and adrenaline. CHARACTERSThe archeologist. At first the reader is excited for his find, until they discover how he behaves. FLOW & PACINGThe opening set up the discovery, the middle set on the explanation of the discovery and the ending is about consequences for one's actions. Well done using a 300 word count. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story. The story must use the prompt words in the story, which the author does without the words feeling forced. Well done. The story builds suspense well. This Flash has a lot of potential as a longer story. A quick story that will intrigue and keep you hanging like the Professor. An Angel Army Review
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You responded to this review 08/13/2025 @ 8:25pm EDT