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 Dementia - A Prose Poem Open in new Window. [13+]
This is what my life has become....
by 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author Icon
Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A heartbreaking look at the toll of dementia.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

This is a real hard look at dementia. I often find that those caring for loved ones find things in common. My friend at work is caring with her mom with dementia and is going through all the same things mentioned here.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*THE OPENING

The opening interested me as I've mentioned, I have a friend going through the same things with her mom. And, in a way, it's like a full circle in the circle of life.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

I thought the flow and pacing for discussing the toll caring for someone with dementia takes on a person, mentally specifically, was highlighted well for a flash fiction.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story, and this is a relatable story as many find themselves to caregivers for their parents. A well written emotional piece that tugs on the heartstrings.

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