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Business As Usual Open in new Window. [13+]
Rudy's seen it all, and none of it really surprises him anymore
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Jeffrey!

I've spent the past couple weeks hopping around in your port, and I've quite enjoyed myself, mostly in the Flash Fiction folder. FF is a great way to pass the time and dabble in genres I wouldn't usually read, from crime and horror to tragedy and "shock jock..." Other times, such as this one, your work is downright hilarious. Be warned, I'll probably be doing a few more reviews for you through the end of the month, because I have a certain number of stories required for "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window. and it can be wearisome finding people and items I care for on a daily basis. Your briefer work is like brain candy, a box of chocolates... Some of them are a little wormy *Wink*

I love this–two bungling robbers *Rolling* No one gets hurt, and there aren't any dark twists (spoilers!) It's a bright, quick pop that had me chuckling along with the cashier. It would make a great YouTube skit.

As previously mentioned (I know it gets tedious to read the same recommendations over and over, so I'll try not to mention this again) the Contest Entry genre is a dead end when it comes to putting your items out there for people to find, or for Quill Award nominations.

Then, in the second sentence, a comma is needed between "gun" and "nonplussed." And it's "disappointment of" towards the end–love that moment! Also, the third sentence up from the bottom has the word "as" twice; I'm sure there's a better way to frame it.

I'm just nitpicking to make this worthwhile... I'm delighted with the story otherwise. Thanks for giving me a packed port to go through.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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