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Start Here Open in new Window. [E]
A man decides to begin at the beginning
by Jeffrey Meyer Author Icon
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Greetings, Jeffrey!

I'm back *BigSmile* This drabble looks like fun. I'll point out right at the beginning, your subtitle has a typo in it...

I love writing drabbles. There's something so satisfying about writing exactly 100 words, capturing a beginning, middle and end without having to worry about dragging out character development, dialogue, setting, pacing, and all the gazillion little frustrating things that come into play when writing a longform story. If you don't mind, I'll toot my own horn and invite you to stop by "Pocket Size Stories" Open in new Window. for adventures in drabbles - including the story of a band, told in three independent ones *Delight*

This one captures what feels more like a well-made vignette than a complete story. I don't usually fuss too much over what others tell me are the "rules" for drabbles, because I seem to have a pretty good instinct about them, but I guess it wouldn't hurt to go over them with you. Our Aussie pal S 🤦 Author Icon is prepping a drabble party for the WdC 25th Anniversary celebration in September, so I'm hyped about that.

So, yeah: beginning, middle, end, and conflict. There should be a resolution of some kind by the end, and conflict comes in several varieties: man against man, man against nature, man against machine, man against higher power, or flip any of those PoVs (for instance, nature against nature if you personify animals or machine against who knows what if you do sci-fi...)

Using these points, I see we have a man and a machine. I spot a contradiction in the use of the word "patience." He stared patiently at the screen, yet he didn't have the patience to use a pen and paper? Also, I want to be sure I have the twist down right. At first I thought maybe he was a police officer, a newbie. But it's fairly obvious by the end, he's the person of interest. Which leaves us with more of a tease than anything else, a glimpse of a potentially criminal mind at work. In fact, I just realized why he didn't want to write by hand - evidence *Shock2*

Wow, ok, now I'm impressed. That was quite clever. Perhaps you don't need any advice on this one after all *Laugh* What fun!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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