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 The Fallen Knight Open in new Window. [E]
A willful knight taking on one last adventure
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a deeply sad and highly metaphorical fable of a young boy crossing over to the next great adventure. We hang on tight, hoping to see him thrive, and feel a touch of anguish when it seems as though nothing more is to happen when the lights go out. Your frame of a daring knight escaping from prison is a fitting allegory for the universal human yearning for a release from the burdens of life lived in sickness and poverty. Unfortunately, the ending seems unhappy and fatalistic, as we see the journey end in exhaustion and darkness, with only a fleeting glimpse of what we might hope was heaven, rather than the boy reaching a heavenly reward or even a healing after surgery. I personally prefer a more faith based worldview, with the optimism of a happy ending making up for any amount of suffering in this life.

I would suggest you choose three relevant genres for your item, because it will put your story in front of as many people as possible who are searching, and it will provide your item with more chances to be nominated for Quill Awards. I might choose Spiritual, Mythology, Fantasy, Tragedy, Death, Philosophy, Teen, Drama, Dark, Gothic, or Psychology.

I found this to be quite striking and memorable, but perhaps your sentence structures could be tidied up a little more. Are you perhaps a non-native English learner? You have done well here; I can see you have a bright imagination. Perhaps you would like to use ChatGPT or Grammarly to help you see how your prose could be smoother.

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