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Thoughtfulness Open in new Window. [E]
He picked flowers for me while on a walk with the dog.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

A snapshot of flowers in the life of a poet.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poet did a great job capturing a moment in time using a good economy of words.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a Kimo poem. It is an Israeli version of a haiku. There is an example of the poetry style in the static item. I found it helpful.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the item easier to read on WDC.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Dying now, petals fall on my keyboard." I found this to be a very succinct description. I could easily see petals falling onto a keyboard. I like the use of dying here to evoke emotion - of a time that's come and gone and evokes a bit of wistfulness.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. Why did he pick the flowers? The title offers an explanation to the why. I enjoyed the sincerity of the gesture and the smile it brought the poet. A very heartfelt poem.

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