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 A Funny Love Poem Open in new Window. [E]
Love can be funny, but sometimes the truth is easy to decipher - a rhyming poem.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was a lighthearted look at unrequited love.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poet uses a good economy of words to tell a story - and just when you thought "he" got the girl.... well, maybe not?

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 4 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "But regardless of change and the life I'd forecast,
Time still marched on, and my love she'd look past." There are nice storytelling elements here, hinting at changes made to attract his love, but alas, she's not quite looking. Nice hints and tones of unrequited love here.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader keeps them reading until the end to see what happens. The title is an okay fit for the poem, due to the lighthearted nature. Um, I just had a thought - maybe the poet's love is love for a pet? I think as a reader, you can interpret any way. Nice, rhythmic beats.

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